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Return to Term One Writing Assignments = = =Assignment Sheet:=




 * Topic: **Describe your ideal utopian dream for your future career or relationships or rules of school or rules of society. Essentially, what are you passionate about that would exist for you in an ideal world.


 * Assignment Requirements **
 * § Hook
 * § Clear, topic sentence
 * § 3-4 supporting ideas
 * § Elaboration and details for each of the supporting sentences
 * § Strong concluding statement (either emphatic statement, quote, or call to action)


 * Assignment Component **
 * Pre Write:** Fill out pre-write paragraph worksheet (found in a folder labeled passion paragraph right behind the expressive prewrites section)
 * 1st Draft:** Make sure all elements are included
 * Self-Edit:** Using the highligthers, make changes to your paper
 * Conference with me**
 * Final:** Handwritten or typed version submitted with 1st draft and my sticky note
 * Publication:** Save one copy to put on your passion poster

=Rubric=

**Paragraph Skills** **(20)**    || * Paragraph is clear and address audience **Writing Skills** **(20)**    || * No errors with commas and capitalization **Topic/Focus** **(10)**   **Format**  || * You stick to one passion and you remain on topic.
 * **Criteria** ||  **Outstanding--4**  ||  **Satisfactory--3**  ||  **Needs Improvement--2**  ||  **Lacking--1**  ||
 * Strong hook
 * Has a strong, clear topic sentence which expresses the main idea
 * Has 3 or more supporting details/ examples with elaboration.
 * Includes an effective concluding statement: quote, emphatic statement, or call to action. || * Paragraph is clear and addresses the audience
 * Ok hook
 * Has a clear topic sentence which expresses the main idea
 * Has at least 3 supporting details with limited elaboration.
 * Includes a concluding statement that is not an effective conclusion. || * Has a topic sentence that is unclear or inaccurate
 * Hook is attempted
 * Has fewer than 3 supporting details/ examples
 * Lacks in elaboration
 * May not have a concluding statement || * Unclear or absent topic sentence
 * No hook
 * Not enough supporting details OR examples are insufficient to support main idea
 * Very little elaboration
 * May not have a concluding statement ||
 * You express ideas simply and clearly using vivid words.
 * You have eliminated “be verbs”
 * Your sentences are strong, and the beginnings are varied.
 * Your passion for the subject is clear || * Some errors with commas and capitalization
 * You express ideas simply using vivid words.
 * Your sentences are suitably varied.
 * You have a few too many “be” verbs.
 * Your passion for the subject is clear || * Several errors with comas and capitalization
 * You repeat the same words and/or some words are unclear
 * Sentences are basically the same
 * Paragraph sounds dead
 * Your paper relies heavily on “be verbs” || * Tons of errors with commas and capitalization.
 * You have a limited vocabulary
 * Sentences are all the same
 * Paragraph sounds dead ||


 * Typed, readable font, double-spaced, indented paragraph. Only one paragraph in length. || * o You stick to one passion and remain mostly on topic.
 * o You list several passions and/or deviate from the topic. ||  || * Your paragraph has no clear focus.

**Passion Poster** || * Shared with class.
 * Incorrect Format ||


 * Contains your paragraph, name, and at least one picture representing your passion.


 * Items are on poster board. || || || * Not shared with class


 * Does not include a picture.


 * Is not on poster board. ||

= Madsen Example=

[Often little kids play school—fighting over who will play teacher. The lure of the whiteboard and being in command urges each child to whelp, “Pick me; pick me.” As kids mature, playing the “rowdy” student seems more idel,, but I always wanted to be the teacher.] [**hook**] //Teaching is my passion//, //and fulfills my American dream of attending college to pursue my career.// (**//topic sentence//**) __Though teaching is a selfless job, some of my reasons for being a teacher are selfish: by teaching, I get to continually learn more about my favorite things—reading, writing, and technology; and I have an excuse to devour young adult literature at a steady rate. Since, I “have” to read what the kids are reading, and since I get discounted and sometimes free books, I get to enjoy reading and discussing what I read with my students__. (**__idea #1 and elaboration__**) Rest assured, I am not entirely selfish. I also enjoy teaching because I love youth. This age group always surprises me, gets my humor, and feeds my energy. I love being around “troubled” teens, as we are all troubled. (**idea #2 and elaboration**) __But there is nothing better than seeing a teen’s troubled eyes turn to joy when he looks proudly upon his academic success; or turn bright with the knowledge he can “get this hard stuff”; or turn hopeful when he discovers the joy of life. Ultimately, the best and real reason why I teach is because I can make a difference in the lives of others. Education encompasses much more than the ability to read and write, it means teaching others how to be successful human beings. As a teacher, I can help a student become a better citizen, and if we have better citizens, we will have a better country.__ (**__idea #3 and elaboration__**) //To this end I have dedicated myself and will continue to dedicate myself to my job, no, my passion: teaching.// (**__concluding sentence__**)